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WOMEN ARE IN OUR ARMY TOO, FIGHTING ALONGSIDE MEN, BUT NEVER  SEEM TO GET THE SAME PRAISE, AND THIS IS COMING FROM A MAN !!


NOT JUST FOR MEN

 

I was there to do a job

I had trained for years to do

Standing on the front line

I could only think of you

 

Bullets flying round my head

Mortars landing near

My world was full of noises

Your voice all I could hear

 

Asking me to keep safe

While serving miles from home

With all my men around me

Still feeling all alone

 

A soldier takes a hit

He is lying on the ground

Without a second thought from me

His body I surround

 

Keeping him from further hurt

Is foremost in my mind

I drag him to his safety

To the danger I am blind

 

This is what I live for

Trained for all my life

To be a combat soldier

And secondly your  WIFE.

 

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Well done

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Well done for taking the issue on and it's great to see our ladies heralded in this way. I enjoyed this poem and it flows well with solid word music throughout. I'd have to take a close look at L1 S3 as that one did trip me for some reason.

Overall a really super poem and well said indeed.

Best Neil

 

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Nice work Glyn. I like the way you can take something remote for your subject, this seems to be a skill of yours.

I enjoyed reading this, it flowed well, had a good story with a twist at the end. Topical subject too.

Nice balance and rhyme, great stuff!

Thanks for sharing!

 

NOT JUST FOR MEN

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I think this was well written and a wonderful tribute to the woman who serve this country as well as others.
I found it full of honor and respect for the job they do. To often they are overlooked simply because we don't like to think of women making the same sacrifices that men do. This is an Exceptional piece.
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Nice one

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very well put.

 

I like this one

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I prefer the topic you chose - it's a very sensitive one for me too.

I have always felt a deep sense of respect for martyrs, men and women alike.

This poem is a good one. Keep going

Best wishes,
Varshana xxxxxxxxxxx